dark corners, empty spaces, no happy places
no light, nothing to fill the void, happy places
[nonexistant]
cornered in, trapped inside, can't get out
[of my own mind]
burning up, crying out, take me out
[of my private hell]
hold me tight, let me go, get out
[of my wounded heart]
get away, please stay, don't walk out
[of my shattered life]
take me out, keep me in, save me from
[my disturbing thoughts]
don't let me show, but let me feel, wake me up from
[my confusing love]
you were here, i saw you, you were gone, i missed you
but you weren't gone because i missed you when you were here
my mind has one question, undecided, confused
[where'd you go?]
2 comments:
I like all the feelings I receive from your poem. The contradictions make it seem a lot stronger. I think the words in the brackets are really cool and adds some extra creativity to your poem. I love it. Great job!
Helen, I agree that the contradictions strengthen the poem, and I, too, really like the bracketed parts.
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